Very nice. It has a striking, poignant tone. But it drops, beatifully, like the 'poet' falling to his/her knees. All I can say is, beauty is everywhere if you choose to see it. Then again, sometimes it isn't. But with what this poem describes, it's hard ,I guess, to acknowledge, yet you could describe it's counterpart so vividly, which to me is ironic. So I guess that leads me back to my original point about beauty. And I guess that also validates your poem, particularly the last line. You've opened up quite a discussion, which proves to me the power of literature!) so great job!:)

strangely personal. and i'm okay, day by day..you?

oh-my-god-!wow...wow...yes, truly not the younger-like stuff i'm used to reading. awesome. wow...

The alliteration and flow of words really come together. Although I was sitting there with my dictionary looking up a word every 3 lines...

Ooh, methinks melike it. Ilove the word "debauchery". And here's one i've never seen before: lascivious. I looked it up and added it to my List of Fun New Words. I think I'll use it to insult someone sometime.

Word for word. Here's one for you: aposeopesis. It means, "a dramatic pause as if the speaker were unwilling or unable to continue."

it's a nice poem, which speaks well of the coming corruptness of the world; however, forgive me if my interpretation may be off, as i found the style hard to follow at times...try to be a little less complex and focus more on flow in your poetry rather than extravegance.

You would think if a, ' poet pleads,' it would be like a, harrowed hart, rather than, as you put it, a ,' harrowing hart.' The first sounds more like the deer is beleaguered, the second as if it is some killer stag on the lose! A person must be brave or confident to risk such fierce alliteration. dc

Proudly pregnant daughters defy

Failing fathers and broken bearers

(these 2 lines struck me deeply..blatantly honest voice here. Good use of words, overall.The line-by-line rhythm is interesting as well...if only somewhat didatic...do keep writing!)