Nice work. It's always cool to play with the shape of your poems.

I really like the structure on this! The flow was really nice and having "drowning" written vertically gave a sense of sinking. This was great!

The slide of letters produces a slippery rhythm, very nice. Your bio is..neverending..btw :P

I really like this poem. Very creative. Great work!

wow, full of profound meaning and chilling imagery the format was good too

keep writing!

leria (review below) that was so harsh,dude,its a good piece.

i love it actually,the formatting is perfect.

interesting use of format here...i love shape poems, and with FP's stringent formatting i guess this is as close as one can get to shape poems.

do keep writing D

you're making it look long when its just this teensy little the idea isn't still.

Yay! It rocks... I like it. Dark but good