Very nice, romantic yet sad. x

Crowd--Sound = D.N.R.

forget me too; (to?)

Ok, that's it for the cosmetic corrections Onto the content! I personally feel you could have done better than this. It doesn't quite flow like some of your other pieces (maybe because I detest the pentameter) and it reads too literally. I don't know.

sad but beautiful ending. after reading poems like this u just feel like sighing. *sighs*. (j/k). anyway, LOVE it. the rhyme and rhythm in this is superb, something i can in noway compete with. the flow is awesome and of course the emotions in this are great. u can't stop the inevitable but in this poem u give great detail and write beautifully. great job:-)

very honest and open. thanks for sharing and keep writing!

p.s. God loves you and so do I!