Reviews for Remnants Of My Memory

Reviews For: Remnants Of My Memory

setne 2005-11-23 ch 1,	abuseInteresting. A very unusual format, but I liked it. Keep on writing!
Wingless Cherub 2005-11-21 ch 1,	abuseI haven't read anything like this on this site. This is really good. The title is what attracted me. I really love the way you tie one prose (what's it called again) in with another--(lines(?), one line in with another? is that the phrase I'm looking for? PHASE! That's it.) I meant, I like how you tie one PHRASE in with another, with those -dashed- words. I've never seen anyone write like that on this site, and it's really refreshing. And I like the material you wrote on; you can really tell you wrote it. Really good work. Really. (I sure do say that word a lot).
pwnedbygrace 2005-11-20 ch 1,	abuseThis was absolutely beautiful.. I love the layout of this piece and the almost abstract mood that it causes... very well done.
Hyper Dudette 2005-10-13 ch 1,	abusehey that's a good ryhme scheme and its cool! do you want to review my poem?
Achlys Dyes Poetry 2005-10-05 ch 1,	abusewhoa, i like the style, with the words connecting things like that, like remnants of a memory...o yea, i am that good..heh, really good imagery as well (i wish i had a better word than good but im retarded),very nicely done
mizu no kokoro 2005-10-01 ch 1,	abusewonderful imagery in this poem~ filled with profound thinkings~ good work! keep writing!
Manuel Fajar 2005-09-29 ch 1,	abuseIn that illusion cast by shadowed life, All's glitter shifts as sunlight through clear waves, Non-sensical script wriggles on white sand, All that we grasp's distorted with glass lens, Though salt taste soothes our undiluted blood, That brine heart pumps in measured steady beats, We float on currents gentle moving, No measure of long distance from far shore, There is no bark but our soft skin buoyant, On which to set forth new destinations, But that will have to do as dolphin-like, We choose to leave our solid land for sea, To find new ventures for our heart to feel, To find new depths to plumb and swim freedom.
Loveless To Self 2005-09-20 ch 1,	abuseThis technique that you use is so cool! I love it! good job!
The Melissa Occult 2005-09-19 ch 1,	abuseI never thought a person could be as a cigarette, but it does work. The emphasis of the words is nice, but I'm not quite connecting with this poem right now, must not be in the mood. Probably because it's about love. I have a problem about love as it is. I have thought enough about love from a philosophical point of view that it is no longer love, the emotion that I know, it's love, the abstract idea. By the way, I cannot feel love or hate, perhaps why they fascinate me? I've always seen most guys as blocks and girls as airheads, water on the brain sort of thing. I've been talking to this one guy here, I guess he's about the closest thing I have to a friend, and he was telling me (and I use only a very loose quote) "When I see the stars from my special place (Note: Special place- on top of his car in a cornfield, the midwest blows) I realize how insignificant we really are. You shouldn't be depressed because in the long run nothing you do will ever matter." It's a novel way to cheer someone up, but it had it's effect for good or for ill. I'd been saddened by a book I read, but not because the book was sad, but because it showed me a place in my heart, of a life I'd never know. it was talking about school girls, passing each other on the street and saying hello to one another, playing and laughing. And then later on it talks about missing out on highschool, where all you're supposed to care about are the base emotions, make love while you still can, drinking, taking a few chances. Instead my head is filled with dust, an anti depressent, an anti psychotic, and a plethora of pointless ideas that have no will or means to exit. I'm missing out on highschool (I'm going on 17, so we're about the same age) and depressed because I'm wondering if everything stays the way it is for the rest of forever. I mean, if friendships and love come hard now, will they come hard in the future? bah, I don't know. I almost like posting this as a review where everyone can read it, it's kind of like part of my auto-biography. You sound more agnostic than you do atheistic. I think some atheists denounce the fact of a higher power so fervertly that they are more religious than, say, a good christian. I like writing as women, it just let's my mind rest a little, I don't know, freud would have a bliss with all this feministic/masculine sides of the personalities that I'm getting into. I've heard that people have both a male and female side, and the correct one is more prevelant in most cases. But what many people do is neglect the other side. I mean, some men to forget about emotions, and some women to forget about that drive that powers people. you mentioned questions and answers, next time you review one of my pieces, (if you decide to do so, that is) then read through stabat spiritum (horrid latin I know, I've never taken any classes in it or anything, I found the words on the back of an old record) Closed minded people bug me, I'm religious, catholic actually, but I don't go around dissing or excluding other people because they don't believe in God. As a catholic I am called to be a heart and hearts are made to love. (Quoted from 'the last temptation of christ', a heretical movie, but good,) I like to think that, that we are hearts, and hearts are made to love, so why should we hate? Another interesting religious thing I saw today, I just thought of it because it was religious, but the meaning behind it isn't. Quick lesson- Seraphim: Angels that sit next to god and burn with the fire of love Cherabim: angels that possess all knowledge. Cherubim are higher than seraphim so thus, love is higher than reason. (I saw it in a quote the other day and thought it a nice proof of romanticism) All sweetness to the beautiful Lady Elaine,S.P. (And sorrow for any offenses, if we do offend one another, at least we can know that we are civil about it)
this is my love for you 2005-09-17 ch 1,	abuseMysterious and very fragmented. Nice.
flaming.footprints 2005-09-13 ch 1,	abuseDreamy and dark. I like it ^.^ Keep up the awesome writing ~Shavo
Relayer 2005-09-08 ch 1,	abuseI like the way you've structured this, it has a stuttering, fragmented sense (in my opinion.) Interesting images used too.
Contender 2005-09-07 ch 1,	abuseoh wow. i love it. i love the trransition idea... it works really well. and the overall mood of the tones. that one is going on my faves... a brilliant idea. a good way to show memories hopping from place to place.

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