That was really good, really interesting to read. I loved the way you personified thes feelings or descriptions as people. But it is hard to know if it is poetry or prose. But I suppose you meant it to be like that.

This is one I think I'll come back and read again after I've thought about it more. The intricacy and near-pattern of the rhyme is cool, and there's a depth and spontaneity to this that weaves it's way through the sobriety.

Yes, this is my favorite of your stories as well... totally awesome!! Speaking of awesome... you're a freakin' cool reviewer, too :D Anything I can write for you? Remix requests??

Your sense of rhythm and flow is amazing. In this piece, it's just perfect. There's just a sense of a maturing and the feel of a life lesson, but it's subtle, of course =)

I really enjoyed this piece and hope to see more like it. Good work.

WO! A Douglas Adams fan! Incidentally, he and Terry Pratchett (and Neil Gaiman) are my favorite authors. You should pick up a Discworld novel or something, though, they're very good.

I like this story a lot ^^. Especially this line:

"Finally, One Dimensional Man consented. Grumbling and griping, along he wented."

I don't know why, but I find that absolutely hilarious.

And since you mentioned it, my story "Trinket" isn't actually finished. I plan on getting around to it someday.

Wow... Again you get everything in the picture of a perfect person, and the way he was taught that not everything is perfect by the Wise Man is beautiful.

BTW, it's Sam who's been reading all your poems and the like nonstop.

This is an awesome poem. Very funny in an off beat kinda way. I liked it. But I read it to my bf and he didn't get it.. lol.. But really its very good!