Great fiction. I'm loving Jon more and more.Update soon

Cute ending. Sad about Hannele and May though. I was kind of hoping they'd hit it off.

Oh, I was looking forward to Caleb coming back into the picture. Exciting stuff.

Loved this chapter; It was adorable. Matt has a pretty cool mum. Jealous =3

Morning! I love these guys. They're so much like my own school friends =3 I'm surprised Matt didn't get suspicious when Jon had his arm around Corin's neck, though. Or was it in a different position to how I imagined? It was hard to tell.

I really love your characters.

Anyway, reading the rest tomorrow :)

'But if I’d known how the day would turn out I would have been a lot more excited.'

That line sort of killed this chapter for me. It gave too much away.

Asides from that, I really liked it. It looks like I'll be bumping your reviews up to '200'

I'll be honest. There are a lot of grammatical mistakes, and some sentences don't flow as well as they could. A little more description wouldn't hurt either.

However, there are a few things that really appeal to me with this story so far. First of all, the main character - he's not only gay, but a little camp too. I really like that, he's very likable and realistic. The contrast between him and Jon is really appealing as well. I like most of your dialog and it was definitely a very strong opening chapter.

Kudos. I'm looking forward to more.

Great story!
It's so gayish!
Lol.
Actually I have been looking forward for a happy ending.
Like,when they graduated and then bla-bla-bla...
But overall,it is still a great story

Matt's a complete and utter psycho...i LOVE him!... Great story so far...and Jon is just too sweet.

1:"another murderess glare" murderous. Jessica could have given the other kind, but Jon couldn't.

Here a plain pizza comes with peperoni.

I just have to say: I love Matt.

6:"are you read yet? ready

I guess Billy kept trying to change who Corin was (at the concert) so he's probably better off without him. And Kevin could use a little attention.


I think this is my favorite 'go to pick up the sister, but take the brother out' story and I wrote one.

Very awesome story! Please write more soon! =)

AWn

this is awesome. you should win an award, or like a hat (lol)
write more!

LOVE!

OMG i love this! no lies. i do i do i do XD