Nice. *claps* It's a very sweet song. It would go well with a simple guitar tune. I could imagine it already. ^_^ keep writing!

The stanza under "A," these were my two favorite lines:"I look for heart when cannons cry" (single n in canon intentional?) and "The only truths are in a lie." Throughout this song, I feel trapped in the present, needing to move somewhere else but unable to admire the past: "August's intentions are the news of the past." The only thing that lightens my mood from knowing we live on man-groves (men's graves) is the fact that there are four I's, three you's, and before the final you, you fall to saying "we" and "our." Inevitably together. My heart melts!

I liked this song more than the one you wrote about jailbreak... Anyway it looks as if Fiction Press pooed on your format :D

Beautiful. I think I like the last stanza best. I think I will take this to my piano and make a tune for it. I'm not gonna steal it and put it on my next album or anything...just a fan interpreting it herself through music, if that's okay. Did ANY of what I just said make sense? O.o