Reviews for teenager fail to be

Reviews For: teenager fail to be

Devil's Footprint 2006-03-30 ch 1,	abuseAs always, you fail to dissapoint me. Really, everything you write is great, and its hard to review because I feel as if I'm just repeating my comments. Maybe I need a thesaurus...
Plinky 2005-12-29 ch 1,	abuseWow. You write the sort of poetry that i want to scrawl notes around the edges of, just so i can hold all the ideas together in my mind. Ever get that? No? Ah well. I think my favourite part would have to be- "just to f a i l but in the so-called prime of your life" The pace was perfection. You really captured a sort of falling into failure quicker and quicker, and then stopped abruptly on the 'but'. I like pace. Hehe. I liked the bloody fingerprints and the "mommy there's a madman outside" as well. Interesting dimension to add. Lovely poem. You managed to keep the flow and interest going all the way to the end. Fantastic ending. Must read more of your poems. keep writing! ; )
Kusje 2005-12-28 ch 1,	abusei like it.. an odd twist, but its good.
Ajna 2005-12-02 ch 1,	abuseOh, I absolutely adore this! Very nicely written, I enjoyed reading this. My favorite lines are "You decisively take the car key to your arm// it's your goodbye to the world." It's great how you poke a bit of fun at such a topic. Great poem.
clockwork Kiss 2005-11-23 ch 1,	abusei always think i'm not going to be very impressed from the start of some of your poems, but by the time i get to the end i'm in awe. the way this picks up pace is breath-taking, also in the way your diction and imagery keeps getting more frantic. plus, i like your idea here. important message that -needs- to be heard. i think everything from "back of the motorcycle" on is just amazing. like i said, i thought the beginning was a little slow, but the end completely made it up for it and even seemed to make it fit. loved the "no allies in the drawing room" part. great write, as usual.
crackpot 2005-10-01 ch 1,	abusei like the recycle thing. if i were more articulate i could tell you what i got from this. i just wonder who the narrator is speaking to exactly
Sharakinpaix 2005-09-20 ch 1,	abuseYikes, the angst hit me like a bazooka warhead, all coming down!I loved the images that related so well to your attitutde. So convenient that poems naturaly go down. Even reading it three times, I can't help but get confused between teenaged lust and depression. I also can't help but feel that this emotion is partially the reason the atmosphere has projected out so well! It would be nice if the allusions were clearer, but if that wasn't the intention, nevermind!
not sure yet 2005-09-20 ch 1,	abusehmm, some of these lines really got me, others didnt, i dont know, it's well written with a good flow, nicely done
peaceman4ever 2005-09-20 ch 1,	abusenow that is what i called BRAVO
do not resuscitate 2005-09-15 ch 1,	abuseit surrounds us & you've described it perfectly. you amaze me.
APersonAndAHalf 2005-09-10 ch 1,	abuse"you decisively take a car key to your arm" I adore that line for some reason, but the whole thing is great. Sorry for not reviewing in a millenium or so...~A. Person
lackluster 2005-09-09 ch 1,	abusethe imagery is just gorgeous. i love all the descriptions and the poem and wording itself is amazing. wow.
shola 2005-09-09 ch 1,	abuseHm...I like it. I do. Some of your beter imagery is in there most definitely, and it's a subject you write really well on.I love the use of bracketed 'asides', it's a really nice knack you have, the timing of them is impeccable.I'm not so sure about the s p a c e d out letters. I can't use them. I stopped being able to use sound tricks a long time ago. It's just a second look at that one part of it might be worthwhile. It's a great one though. Return to old form. two thumbs up
i was a postcard 2005-09-08 ch 1,	abuseWOW. i hope your inspiration comes back, because this is amazing. it has the same fast, yet carefree, yet urgent feel of "jack and diane in the stars now" which i really loved. this is desolate. no hope, it seems. "the type of boy that makes a good one weak in the knees" gorgeous. you rock.

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