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| Sairn 2006-03-13 ch 1,  | abusenice story. Check the third paragraph, last sentence though. I think it would be The two, instead of they two. Only grammar error i can find. The story was good, freaky ending. I woud have added some other horror element at the end though to conclude it. You could either reveal more about the beast or have somethin horrific happen to Alexis. Idk if u plan on continuing this but if u do i would definetely continue reading. good job. |
| Broseph115 2005-10-17 ch 1, | abuseHmm very interesting, this is the first time that I have read anything by you, actually I tried to read Vendetta but I think i needed to have read some of your earlier stuff to understand hehe. Anyway, Lily's nightmare was really cool, especially with the guy and the light at the end of the hallway. Creepy note to end it on, hehe. I really liked this, good job. |
| goalieman7707 2005-09-10 ch 1, | abuseThe story was great keep it up. Some parts of it were really confusing, but I think that added a little bit to the suspense. I'd still like to know a couple things like why the walls were closing in, and why the was beast chasing her. Was there a reason all that was happening, or not really? Good story all things considered. |
| Saeger 2005-09-09 ch 1, | abuse...Wow... That hit on the horror feel more than a few other things i read in real life have. Nice. In a gruesome sorta way... |
| MB 2005-09-09 ch 1, anon. | abuseYes, well... that was odd...Hm... There's really not much I can say..so yeah. |
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