this is so sad, I love it, very emotional. I hope there will be more.

Well Done.

Solo.

The separtation of the last line really added to the affect. Damn sad though. Good job, and hey you got me to read fiction.

:( Very well-written but SAD (but, hey, sad is good). Is there going to be more...?:>

wow...i really like this piece so far...you used a lot of description and that made it a lot more interesting to read since usually people dont use a lot of description...i like the cliff-hanger ending...i cant wait to see what comes next...good job!

Wow this is really powerful! Great job!

Whoa. I like the last line, it just gives this an edge to it. Nicely written in a way that i think has a pretty deep concept. good job. Maybe you should come by sometime.