that was so...abstract, but I really loved it!

You're magic with words, darlin'.

Seriously.

her hair curls in double helixes that
lift fast like a poodle skirt

was probably my favorite line.

I miss seeing new pieces. How is Cynics Creed going? Are you still trying to publish?

wow, love this poem! all of the images are amazing; you use just the right words in the right way. ^_^ great job!

-Lefty

The lines from "Her hair curls... pastel lips that" really worked for me. Interesting imagery, very new. The turning x3 felt off for me, may just be that song by the Byrds interupting my thoughts, nonetheless... Likewise, I wasn't fond of the repetition of ankles, I wasn't really sure where it was going, plus the contrast between brittle and solid threw off the person described in the next few lines. Although, the mention of ankles did make me think of a skating rink before you mentioned skates. I think ankles could work, just not in the group of three, or perhaps if group like that, spaced out.Neat piece, fun with tunes and all that. Keep on ^^

I absolutely love this.It's just so...oh, I don't know. It's wonderful, that's what.