   no.peace.los.angeles 2006-12-03 . chapter 1Interesting poem you have here. I do like that the entire thing is about writing. That's fabulous. You have such a way with words, and I wish you were still posting on this site, because I do miss reading your work. Keep writing! :) |
 sarah1491 2006-01-30 . chapter 1Nice poem ;) |
| Marioh 2006-01-18 . chapter 1 beautiful piece! specially the line ''starched sameness'', speically because thats how ifeel with most of the poetry i read ( except for the few which i review). This piece is very effective and the flow superb! |
| Searching4Truth 2005-10-21 . chapter 1 Wow, excellent poem. The depth was amazing. The words flowed together beautifully. What a great vocabulary! Lol, great job! I can't say enough good things about this poem. Keep writing, you're really good! :-) |
| Exquisitely 2005-10-20 . chapter 1 I totally agree with White Phoenix Erialis. To quote Anonymously Loved, "intricate vocabulary". And to repeat the question, were you from RGS? I am curious for I am in RGS currently. :3
I really liked the way this poem (to me) had different tangible layers - the deep, underlying meaning and yet the portrayal of innocence in writing. You do poetry so well. Brought down my self-esteem, bleh. (X |
| Susie Mango 2005-10-12 . chapter 1 a ragged sailing, corrugatedlike the score of tolling bells...Each break in rhythm here
is an enjambement,the suggestion of sanitythat catches at barbed gates;
would it be too imposing to say i love you?I have come to your poetrylate
will a ravenous hunger foryour words and phrasesstrung together witha sort of tangable nostalgiathat gripsat the back of the throata strip of velcro thatwon't go down
no matter how much you swallow |
| xaquelina 2005-09-25 . chapter 1 I really like the symbolism here, good job.
Oh, and thanks for the review on mine, I agree about liking free verse better, but my English teacher has this thing about wanting poems to rhyme. :) |
| White Phoenix Erialis 2005-09-20 . chapter 1 Woah.
You have an astounding vocabulary that sweeps me away. I admire the flow of your poem- there is a youthful yet insightful feel to the way you write that is incredibly inspiring. |
 mizu no kokoro 2005-09-20 . chapter 1So many words and beautiful meanings~~ you present your poems so stylishly~ good work!
keep writing! |
| Oriel Vaughn 2005-09-13 . chapter 1 Serendipity! Sounds cute. A rather onomatopeic word :) A lot of deep words here - but they fit in the spirit of this poem, so that's good. You have a really wide vocabulary! Lastly, I'd like to say, yes this does remind me of RGS! lol. Keep up the good writing! :) |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-09-11 . chapter 1 Nice realization and ferocity. |
| Chandra-Moon 2005-09-11 . chapter 1 Lovely! This is what poetry ought to be! |
| Munchin 2005-09-10 . chapter 1 WOw.. you seriously have a vocabulary. it is amazing ad this piece demonstrates it. It is really great! I liked it but I can't say why.. but I liked the use of different words.. |
| Elizabeth Ebony 2005-09-10 . chapter 1 WOW.that was so beautiful,and i adore the words and the language you've used to make it truly special.it also flows wonderfully.great work.
e.ebony. |
| Aquafied 2005-09-09 . chapter 1 Once, every morning flagsthat are blue snatches ofa starched sameness.- oh gosh, reminds me of sound of music, crisp colors. wow, it reminds me also of a book i am reading, everything is surreal and better than what it seems.
is an enjambement,the suggestion of sanitythat catches at barbed gates- barbed gates. love it. reminds me of sealed fate.
we are all a bit, nostalgic anyway.
andnothing impeaches me nowas long as I can explainmy skirmishes with truth,- reminds me of a postal service song.
salute. |
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