Heya Jeff,

Wow...I can't believe how well-written this is. I just don't know what to say. Nice use of parallel structure and all that good stuff, of course, but...you make me sad. I don't know how I can help. *hugs* Pease feel better! I'm always here, you know. I know you know. I know that's not all you need though. But whatever you need, you don't need loneliness. I can at least help with that, even if my company isn't the kind that you need, right? Great job on the story, btw.

That's lovely. Wonderful compassionate writing. A discovery about oneself. Good Job, Abbrev!

-Icatora

Beautiful! Absolutely beautiful. Short and sweet. I like that you didn't weigh it down with too much description, as many would tend to do.

Other things I liked:She knows his name, and he doesn't even notice he hasn't introduced himself. Wonderful touch. (I had to read it twice to make sure.)

Neither of the characters were (was? pardon my grammar) described physically. They are neither attractive nor ugly. They are just themselves. I'm not sure whether or not that was intentional, but I liked it nonetheless.

How you slipped in the sentence, "Her clothes were perfectly dry." It keeps the reader from being too disappointed or confused at the end, but at the same time does not necessarily give away the ending.

I can't find a thing to criticize. Good job! As always, I look forward to your next piece.