huh. This seems like some of your older poems. Its good, but not your maximum effort. It looks messy for some reason. I like your word usage and the imagery but I (yeah call me a hypocrite) think you can do better.

beautiful.. very sweet.. I liek the short lines.. it works well

Didn't like this one too much. The lines don't seem to fit very well, despite the rhyme scheme.

that's cool. I really love this! the beauty in the light ,the doubt. the new lines make the rhythm work well. very cool. i like the idea. the fear and finding the beauty. beautiful