Spaces? So it ain't dashes? Anyway, yeah the formatting on fp gets annoying when things don't go your way. So anyway its okay i guess. Got a bit confused with the one word thingymagic.

you can use dots instead of dashes if that would make you happier.. fp formatting drives me crazy sometimes too

anyhow... awesome poem the format is really cool and the ending is so amazing.. great great job

Your poems are getting really 'thin' now. That's bad news for me coz makes it harder for me to understand. =p Sorry I'm too stupid and lazy to figure out the real message. But that "Ah" thing was... a statement of the obvious?

And you're really spending a lot of time on how the poem is supposed to appear, you know, a right angled triangle and so on =p. Hope it doesn't affect the real message the poem is supposed to appear. =)

Hm... I dunno, it's ok I guess. But the dashes are a bit distracting. And although you seem to be fond of one-word lines now, they're getting a bit too repetitive in this one. Good job, anyhow.

Beautifully haunting. This is a piece that will stick in my mind. Very well done