Wow, I love this one, this is your best so far. great job applying the 'north' in with the emotion, keep it up

wow, that's really good! I'm off to read the next one now!

well sis, you KNOW i love all ur work...so this is really good...*hugs*

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Hm...not sure. The first thing i noticed was that you repeat the word "reaches" a lot. I don't like repeating words unless its for dramatic effect. You could use words like, captivates or conquers, invades or touches, tarnishes, envelopes etc etc.

There are also lines i dont get. For example:

"Fleeting masks hide uncovered"

fleeting masks hide uncovered, what?

Example:"Remains are all I haveNo void reaches my soul"

If all you are is remains, then your sould IS what is void. If you are just remains your soul is void, u have no soul.

I think you do what I do. I used to invent sentances that, although they sounded great, actually meant nothing when you read them, when u read and decifered them they didn't make sense. Maybe I'm wrong but I think you should revisit (only a few) of your sentances.

Aside from that, this is good. There is no question, your writing style is sound, you write well. ^_^