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| NightAngel117 2005-10-28 ch 1,   | Wow. This is definitely going on my favorites list. The lines which really got to me were:"Maybe if I become someone I’m not, you might love me/But even then, you would have the heart to deny me/And watch my black heart crumble and freeze."And then, of course, the last line:"You can't say I didn't try." I just thought those gave the poem a good tone. And the varying stanza length emphasizes the most powerful parts of the poem. Plus, I think everyone can relate to the theme of 'not meant to be'. I liked it a lot overall. ~NA117~ |
| lilyqueen777 2005-09-10 ch 1, | first thought: wow! and its still is wow! very deep poem. i love why u felt like that and the tone and feeling. but why do u have this "bad habit" and why do u start writing but be scared? but still very powerful and out there! |