i got this. and you didn't really need to punctuate or capitalize, like your other reviewer said. no, i got it. e.e. cummings did the same thing. granted, e.e. cummings didn't write prose poetry... well, whatever. its an inventive piece. it's got that imaginative quality, like youre in peter pan where theres lsd and weed... and the whole idea of blonde hair and blonde eyes... no, i know what you meant by that too.

not the color blonde, but the idea (it was genius, let me tell you). yeah, it was a fantastic piece. pity you didn't get more reviews. and i think your punctuation and capitalization is perfectly wonderful. it was a part of the piece's tone and setting and idea. and Tynan is a pretty name.

i dunno, i'd like to see more pieces like this by you. i'll be on the look out. :)

HUH? Wha' happened? Please punctuate and capitalize, for the love of Pete! Argh!