Oh wow! This is really good. I'm loving the idea and I'm already really attached to the characters. This is great writing, really intresting to read. Please please keep going I really want to know aht happens! Great story! Oh good choice of names for the characters too :)

chase reminds me of someone...(bahaha is that a bad thing? wink wink)

either way this is awesome. rules ARE for squares. vair exciting too. hooray for mel!

ah! you can't leave off there! i wanna know more! Fae is so funny, i like her! A little more detail would help with the story, but besides that, it's great.

Oh, it's so sad. I hope there's more soon because this is just too good to take forever to update. I like how your characters seem real, and how Chase acts like a normal kid. this is so great! hope there's more soon. :-)

oh, wow. You introduced and gave the characters personalities VERY well for a first chapter, and I can't wait to see what happens next! (so i'll finish this review and go on...)

GODDAMNIT WHY DO THEY ALWAYS HAVE TO DIE AT THOSE PERFECT MOMENTS?!?either way. crepy. this one's a keeper.

oy gavalt, i am bookmarking this page.i like chase. exciting. you are a good author. i'm kind of jealous of your imagination and ability to write fantasy.xothea

This is really good! I can't wait to see what happens :)