Well... it feels finished to me... the last two lines ended it very nicely... the only criticism I have though is... try to add a comma after you "Oh"s it's look much better... wonderful read!
Coda Lovelance 2005-09-12 . chapter 1
Yeah. I'm too lazy to sign in ^^. I see what you mean about it being "unfinished" I don't know what else to say. It's not one of my favorites of your work, but, it's till good.