It's really good so far! More!

Poor Kerry! That would be so humiliating. Okay, so maybe past humiliating. Well, I have to go to bed, (study my vocab -cough-) But I really like this story, and will be watching for your update.

That is, if you decide to update. You haven't updated since last year!

Ha! This is AWESOME! I hope you update soon, and I am definately adding this to my favorites list. :-D Exactly the kind of stuff I like to read . . . and it's well written, to boot. If everything you post is of this quality in this story, you'll get high reviews no problem...

Wow, I was expecting something more . . . more magical (Defenatley Kerry not naked XD) , but this is stil good =) I liked your descriptions, or rather the way you wrote things . . in what order. If that made any sense, lol =P

Actually, I just read a story (Interesting . . . It was under the fantasy catagory but was a bout a girl who was like . . . doing stuff with some guy from some 'made up' world. . . o_O Sort of, but Kerry didn't do anything XD But I don't know, just sort of reminded me waking up naked =P)

Thanks for mentioning me in your story XD Haha, I felt so special. Yippee.

A few spelling or gramatical mistakes, nothing big. Usual stuff.

I personally thought, (Just my opinion) that you swore a bit too much . . Like, every paragraph was swearing, so . . . just a thought.

Thanks for posting on my story, I really appreciated it. And yes, it does make you feel good to get reviews ^^ I am actually REALLY glad I joined this because getting reviews inspires me.

I wonder where this land is. That language Byron spoke, did you actually make up words or just randomly typed some letters . . ?? =P Like did you make a list of what the language was. That would be awesome, maybe I'll do that XD Have my own special little language, actually I do!! From last year I made one up- I've got it in a notebook, I'll use that Haha, thanks!! XP

I thought the last chapter was a bit funnier, her comments she added, the most comments she added her weren't very witty (I think, personally.) but more, swearing. I can see why- she's terrified. I would be too o_O But still . . . Just an opinion.

I think you should describe the new land she is in more. I know it's a valley and has frost, but how big is the valley? Any trees?? Things like that. If you get lazy you don't wanna add that stuff, but ya know =) Makes it better. All the description the better. (Sometimes.)

Good luck, Next time tell me when you update =P Keep up the good work, and I added a Chapter to my story . . so feel free to review. Thanks!! ^^ Great job.

Yay! Another chapter!

'Twas a good one... I laughed out loud at Byron's reaction when he realized she was naked. So he's a prince, yeah? And where exactly are they? (I'm assuming a world entirely of your own, since I've never heard the word Anglix before, and I have never in my life seen an insect-like toucan. Then again, I've never seen a real, live toucan, either, so...)

Anywho.

Great chapter--I can't wait for the next!

~Vi Spark

Oh, I like it, which is surprising, because lately I've become more and more picky about what I read in the fantasy section of FP. The only thing that might bear pointing out to you was that I noticed a few run-on sentences. Nothing serious, just a little distracting.

I already like your main character, and I'm looking forward to seeing where you go with this. I've got to go, or I'll be late for class. I'll try to read the next chapter later.

This story is so fun to read. The way you write it makes it laid-back and easy to understand- a true storytelling style. i can't wait to read more. Your character is awesome, and now that the fantasy part is coming in, I can't wait to figure out the plot. Once again, you don't seem to have trouble with grammar or spelling mistakes, and I don't have very much constructive to say. But it was awesome.

A wonderful introductory chapter. I love Kerry-she's so awesome, and I can totally relate to the red hair thing...lol.

Normally, I would give some cc's, but i can't seem to think of any right now. This was very well done and it's okay that you don't know the plotline. Some of the best stories aren't planned out ahead of time, they just go where the characters take them.

anyway, good job!

Great first chapter!

You've done a great job with Kerry--made her likeable but not too good to be true (which is a massive relief after a lot of the stuff I've been reading lately). I like the fact that she's so three-dimensional--and she's an awful lot like me, right down to the red hair. lol. Guess that helps too.

Also, your style is incredibly easy to read--it's almost more like listening to someone than reading, which is always a good thing when you're writing in first person.

I have a few ideas as far as 'suggestions' go, but I'd like to see what else you have before I offer them...

Though I would like to observe right now that it's awfully suspicious that both her father and her grandmother seem to have disappeared like that... hmm...

Very much looking forward to your next update!

~Vi Spark

interesting. I like. You characterize people very well. keep going.

I liked that a lot. Good characterisation of the narrator.

So... um, my suggestions.I figure this story has to have something to do with time-travel, right? Or at least parallel universes (i love parallel/multiple universes, they're so cool).

And, bring those boys into it again (otherwise, what's the point of having them? And besides, creepy is interesting). They seemed a little strange. Perhaps they're not really boys, perhaps they're not really from earth, or not really from this time.

Or, is her father a time traveller? Has he got a special job to do with it (like doctor who, or like in highlander)? (tbh, he seemed more interesting than the grandma, though i guess she could factor into the story somewhere)

Maybe his job is to keep time running 'correctly' - ie. to keep it running in a linear progression and stop time travellers mess it up (ie. changing history/creating 'loops'). Or to stop time going too quickly or too slow.

Alernatively, she could turn the hourglass over and it could be like a curse. For instance, it could be the hourglass of her life, and the instant she turns it, her time begins running out. (perhaps it is a fortnight until the grains run out and the inevitable occurs, or 48 hours, or something like that).

The story could be that she has to somehow reverse this, but doesn't know how - she has to cheat death.

The other thing, of course, that you can do with time travel stories is past lives. Maybe it rewinds her/fastforwards her into a different life and she has to adapt to it.

I am looking forward to seeing what you actually write.

Wow, this is Awesome =)

I like how it's long . . . (I was hoping it would be shorter but just because I should be in bed now o_O) Not too many Fantasy stories I have been reading lately have been quit this long.

I also find it interesting how you add her remakrs to all the descriptions. I love it!!

Erhm, suggestion?? I know how you feel with the plot line- I used to be like that too, but then I never finished my stories (AT ALL) I have one story with the (very diluted by now I must add) same plotline for like 5 years or something. But everything has changed. . . I have actually redone it like 4 times . . . but I think my newest version will work =P But anywho, back to your suggestions.

I think the Hourglass should be from Kerry's dad or something, like some how it was intertwined . . . Like her dad had made it or delt it or something and the grampa bought it not knowing it's true value and some how it has powers. Like sort of psycic powers like a crystal ball, the time somehow tells when and how long a disaster in the magical world will take place or something and so Kerry and her grampa have to save it or something and then they find Kerry's grandma and dad (Because they had gotten locked up somewhere from some demon thingy person evil . . thing. That's why her dad had to leave, to fend off the bad ppl and he left that to Kerry's grampa for her to find out the secret someday and somehow Kerry's grandma got intertwined. . .) haha, I don't know . . . Like it?? =P

Feel free to stop by my story- 'Carina and the Fairy Crystals' and R&R and tell me what you think. Also lemme know when you add the next chapter =D

Good Luck and Nice Job!! ^^