Very sweet and mystic, like one of those old Tennyson things. My only complaint is that some of the rhymes were awkward. Like "sister" and "sinister." With your descriptive skill, I don't think rhymes were really neccesary. A very engrossing piece, kudos!

This was very nice...you had a very good rhythym going, and the content was quite orignal.

Good job, keep writing.

Pretty story! It's sorta sad, too, but it's very beautiful.

kloud