this one has really nice flow. it just... works. really well.

Wow...I can't believe this doesn't have a review yet, it's a gem! Stunning poem you've got here. First of all, I'm in love with the format of this poem, it really makes the poem unique and breaks up the lines in just the right places. Secondly, every single line of this poem jumps from the page - in particular, I liked the entire second stanza. The way you chose to phrase the things you say is genius. The meaning of this poem is clear, and I love the theme of 'neverland and the real world' ...comparing these contrasts, metaphors of childhood and adulthood...brilliant work. This is definitely one of my favourite poems on this site. Simply amazing work, it is going on my favourite's list. Marvelous poem, keep on writing.