this is interesting, but i think you need to link it more throughly to your timeperiod. for one thing, ACRYLICS WERE NOT INVENTED UNTIL THE 1950s. please correct this! most paintings, in Victorian era, especially portraits, would be in oil. us artists out there plead with you!
and of course, fix other problems, like a few slang words or informality. read it over, and keep in mind the fussy manners of the Victorians.

Hey, it's me! For some reason I never knew you posted this. And why you haven't continued this great beginning I will never know! This is AWESOME. The beginning was my favorite part. I remember helping you come up with the idea for this story, and as far as I can remember it was a good idea, so keep GOING. I'm going to copy you in saying I adore your choice of words. Your work just flows like water, and that is something I am not capapble of. I'm sorry I'm souch a loser friend and never keep in touch. But I LOVED THIS. -A.K. Eighth

Interesting story so far. I got drawn because of the summary like your previous reviewer, though I still haven't found the connection yet. But since this is only the prologue, it's okie! I look forward to reading more! I bet the beginning character and Lucretia are going to cross paths. ^_^ Love interest? Hmm... =)

ps: Would you mind reviewing my story "Lunar Chaos"? Any form of reviews are greatly appreciated, since I would like to improve my writing (praise is good, constructive criticism is greatly appreciated, and flames are accepted, as long as they have a good reason). But please don't feel forced to. ^_^

~Eyes of Amethyst

The summary itself is what drew me in; it was so well-written and just...interesting.

I like it so far. You've dashed together humor, a petulant child, and some strong characters in only the first chapter. Their personalities are already coming out, and it's rare that I find a story like that that isn't already published and on shelves!

I'm very interested in your referance to magic and warlocks. You're going to interlace the beginning character and Lucretia, yes?

There were a few grammar mistakes, but nothing so horrible that it detracts from the reading. So far, wonderful job. I'll be keeping an eye on this.

-Emelie

"It is a contradiction, an anomoly, an apparent impossibility, but it is a truth."-Charles Dickens