Ah this is much better, so much more original. I loved "stars burn in the dark," I can imagine them right there. Except it's daytime here. Ah well. p

Nice one! Love the last line.

I like this, I always wrote poetry in class before I graduated; it was the one place where I knew that I shouldn't but it usual was the one place where I got most of my up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.