Wow. You're a really good writer! I love this story...It's freaky and very cool all at once, which is awesome in my book. :D Thank you for your review of my poem!

Wow you should definitely write more of this! Very good. Your style of writing makes me want to read right through - like one of those books you can't put down until you're done :P

Great story :D

Hey nice story. I may be imagining it, but you ripped your own story! At least i think so. From what lies beyond, one of your horror story about treasure hunters and stuffs. Plus a nightmare on elm strest cliche. Ah well. Anyway, write more horror stories! That's where your abilities lie you sick mad psycopath. Oh and don't forget Hell's Blade and What lies beyond! (Hell's Blade priority)

Certainly one of the better stories you've written but yes, you are correct: when will people learn that old cabins are meant to be left alone? Unless, of course, you're in a Nicholas Sparks novel.

Okay, this had its share of clichés but hey, it's been twisted and played with enough that I didn't notice it. Of course, the bit about the cassette recorder being practically the sole cause of the Thing to be summoned is kind of, well, odd. I'd have thought that deities don't respond well to recorded words. And what the hell was his grandfather thinking when he recorded it anyway?

Maybe to recruit more members? Plausible.

Also, I wish the course of the story wasn't in several days. (Two, from what I gathered.) That made it feel like you were writing this for a school assignment. In all fairness though, this IS a short story.

Your choice of words were sometimes out of character but it didn't seem too out of place. Maybe if the words were a bit simpler, it'd have been more believable. Also, I'd like to say that I liked the decision to tell this story from a first-person point-of-view. I do wish you had made us feel a bit more terrified of the 'It' that came out, you know, probably by repeating some words like... Oh. God god god god god god! That usually does the trick.

Oh yeah, in my opinion, you didn't have to describe the grandfather-mutant-thing in full detail... sometimes by giving the reader the space to imagine it themselves (provided you gave them something as a base, of course) it could have a far greater effect.

All in all, this was a great story. A step in the right direction. Keep it up!

Creepy. I'd entertain that guy with Iced Milo rather than be in this story. Really.