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classic violet 2005-09-25 . chapter 1
Very deep and moving. Simply beautiful.

"the teenage moon, changing personalities as often as i had,uncertainly wavered in thesea-dark evening. that virgin diana would never have fallenfor the same trick i had"

Truly beautiful.

But all of it is beautiful. Keep up this amazing work!
linaeve 2005-09-22 . chapter 1
m, pretty imagery. gorgeously done, though i don't care much for the double parentheses - then again, my preference (brackets) don't exactly show up on fpress, so whatever floats your boat, i suppose. other than that i enjoyed it muchly.

second to last stanza is very romeo and juliet-esque. the mention of diana, the moon's changing 'personality', the overall tragedy... nicely written.
lackluster 2005-09-12 . chapter 1
it's so gorgeous. i mean: perfectionprefectionprefection! especially the imagery.
mizu no kokoro 2005-09-12 . chapter 1
lovely imagery~~ i can feel and see the whole poem going through in my mind~~ great work!

keep writing!
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