wow. awesome. love it!~MagikMelody

wow.. imagery well written~~ ... eerie in a way too~ Good poem

keep writing!

This is very interesting and I enjoyed the imagery you use to describe not only what the child sees but what the child doesn't see. Good job!

I had a question about the line: "Her hunched for in moonlight"-- is "hunched forM" what you meant? Just wondering.

Also I think the last stanza is a little long; maybe split off after "cheeks" to start a new stanza or remove that first bit all together; I think it's a little complex for a child's thoughts.

Great start overall, though, I really enjoyed this! ^_^