Yolo~seriously, you're not going to end it like this. i guess you'll have to, but 'i might be dead we'll just have to see. goodbye." and that's it. You should show instead of tell, and some of your words are misspelled like relieved instead of relived. But you're going to end it like this, aren't you? I don't know if i really like this one. I liked the other story a whole lot better. This one was too short and less descriptive for me.

ok your giving that to your teacher! lol i was sweet a little sad umm i might be dead is a little freaky to end with.Love him but dont let yourself get lost in him you need to know that he might not be your prince but thats ok lol cos guys are sorta like roses they are wonderful flowers but you gotta watch out for the pricks i love you girl im always here for you but give it a shot maybe someday josh will realize what a great girl you are but you have to go for it not wait for him to come to you tell him how you feel and let him know what he loses in losing you. PS your jumpin out of a PLANE WITH ME we are gonna sky dive over germany climb the rockies and walk on the ocean floor in the winter and then find our guys and make them dance in the rain...i think i found him and just never gave him the shot i hope both of thier girls make them happy...