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East-0f-Eden 2008-04-23 ch 1,	abuseDo you still identify with this?
M. A. Queen 2006-02-26 ch 1,	abuseI like the fact that you're proud of your country and all...but this poem really wasn't all that superb. The "I go" bit got redundant and annoying about three lines down, and it doesn't really make the reader want to pay attention (contrary to the views of some of your other reviews). In fact, it makes it seem boring and dull. It also sounded more like the "pros" part of a "pros and cons" list. Try adding more words, making it more powerful, and making the flow a bit better. Anyway...good luck with future writing, hope I helped a bit! :)
blue-eyes91 2005-11-16 ch 1,	abusenice job, the repition really inforced what you are trying to get across, good job, keep writing, if you have time i would like you to review some mroe of mine, adn i will for yougood job and keep writing
Sela-chan 2005-09-15 ch 1, anon.	abuseYesh. I liketh. The repitition, though purposeful, eventually makes the words boring and obsolete. The point is well-driven, but also sounds like a list of reasons. And it sounds like you're reaching for some sports goal... Yeah. It could be better, but you don't need to change it. Case closed.
holocaustpulp 2005-09-14 ch 1,	abuseAnd that is why many like you die. This poem was nothing extraordinary - in fact it was banal and deserves a good yawn. You got the fact that "you go" across, but you never really gave a logical reason; instead, you blabbered about nationalism and duty, etc. In the end, I fail to see your point, and judging this on the basis that you meant to offer me and other readers your ultimate point, I say this is a bad piece. - HP
Sreym 2005-09-14 ch 1,	abuseThis is a really great poem! I like the lines about those who cannot go, b/c that could be me, and all the answers were great. My sister's in Iraq, and I'm gonna send her this, I know she'll agree.
Numb Soul 2005-09-13 ch 1,	abuseThis is a great piece. And believe it or, it made me cry. My uncle is in Iraq right now, and I prey for him, and veryone else who's over there daily. I'm too young right now, but I hope to someday, have to courage to do what you, and those who are willing to fight for us, can do. God bless! And Thank you for fighting for us! Numb Soul.

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