Powerful piece You've written there...a emotional piece about love and friendship, beautifully written

~SG~

Aww... wow. it's so ... truthful, and ... harsh i guess. i really like it and it gives me a warm fuzzy feeling. x^.^V

beautiful and sweet poem. i love the sincere honesty behind these lines and the innocence. u kinda confess along the way but that just adds to its' qualities. i absolutely ADORE the lines 'you dont understand...or maybe you do, maybe you need me as much as i need you'. aw...*sighs* that is amazing. i LOVE it there. anywayz, the rhyming seems a little forced near the end. otherwise, awesome poem, long but good.

~ang/mez

It COULD have been wonderfully tragic. Unfortunately it's as if the whole rhyming thing got in the way and messed it up.

“Should I look awayWhen things go wrongShould I never laugh aloneBecause I have a funny point-of-viewAnd I’m always alone”

This part was choppy and confusing.

“It was you who saved me from that fatal stepOnly you heard the words I never saidAnd how much I admire you,I’ll never say”

This part was really good. You just needed a comma.

It might’ve been the site, but just in case- you still need punctuation in poetry. Use the question marks and periods.

Overall you did a nice job.

This is so beautiful, it's breathtaking. Definitely one of the best poems I've ever read. Very, very nice work. Pretty damn impressive.

Keep it up, girl.

-CM

aw... thats so very true~~ lucky to have friends~~ always, and never take it for granted~

keep writing!