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| KittenX 2005-09-23 ch 1,  | abuseI loved this part "We know that the planetscurl closer to the sun." |
| Chandra-Moon 2005-09-19 ch 1, | abuseBeautiful, as always. You have such a lovely imagination. |
| pollocknicity2 2005-09-19 ch 1, | abuseI really like this, probably because I've thought similar things when I was drunk, so I could relate to it pretty well. I also think the words have a good flow to them. |
| in theory 2005-09-18 ch 1, | abuse"continents, trimmed with confetti;" such beautifully abstract imagery, your language is so alive. |
| Lines To Time 2005-09-16 ch 1, | abuseYOU ARE THE MOST AMAZING POET EVER. That is all. |
| Shadow 3013 2005-09-15 ch 1, | abuseThe 'like' in the first line of the second strophe (stanza) jars the mood; it's an immature word surrounded by what I consider to mostly be elegant phrases. Other than that, this was a very nice poem. Good job, and keep writing! |