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| Jezsh 2006-01-19 ch 1,  | abuselove the line ' translate your words into love (because love is what we're living on). Really speaks. |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-10-05 ch 1, | abuseI like the emotions here. |
| Aquafied 2005-09-16 ch 1, | abusedead is so overused for cant think. i love the first stanza.second one isnt as good, but still divine. traced on fragile skin- i can imagine that in a way, but more of a razor effect. |
| Theory Of The 4th Dimension 2005-09-16 ch 1, | abuseHm.Its quite nice really, the ending made me think that a photo shoot as going on. Thnx for sharing. |
| lackluster 2005-09-16 ch 1, | abusei love it all, really. i mean, it fits so well together and flows beautifully. i do agree: the ending could be better, but it's fine just like it is. the first stanza is my favorite. |
| Moonjava 2005-09-16 ch 1, | abuseOh, I love the first line. Really nice. |
| hiding behind amber eyes 2005-09-16 ch 1, | abusehum...yea my attemps at poems have been ** lately too it must be something in the water lol i like the beginning but not the ending...maybe add more? |
| poetic abortion 2005-09-16 ch 1, | abusethe ending seems fine. I really do not know why you are so ** yoursef ... I love it, really sends this delightful tingle down my spine everytime I read it. just a gorgeous piece overall. ~* noelle |
| mizu no kokoro 2005-09-15 ch 1, | abusehm... the ending seemed fine to me^^ good work! keep writing! |