nice muffin. one thing I'm not liking so far though is that she seems so unhappy herself or if she isn't about to cry about something someone else is.(just to let you know) nice writing though and fun imagination.

Sweet, I like Jack.

poor her! nice chapter again

the characters in this story seem sweet. i wonder what terrible thing could have made her forget that place.

I like the name Jack. from the chapter before i forgot to mention that I really like the part about the black paper in the box. it makes it look really ominous. Nice story, althouh this story seems a little more blan.

where is her sister?

do you mean having the heart of a child and being trapped in an adult body? Nice intro.