omg, that's absolutely beautiful!! i loved it, the imgagery was amazing!! very clever, very clever indeed!! ^_^

wow... lovely imagery, nature truly is a wonder~

keep writing!

this is dense and beautiful, the former because you actually use words in the column of print, some people build the column only three words wide, and for me at least each line does not carry that much weight, whereas, each of your lines has an impact, ' Bats shriek with self-pity,' could stand alone. Good continuity, good work. The rhyming stuff is weird but I though I would try a few, thanks for your comments. dc

Wow, I love this! Your emotions are so clear in this poem and it's very obvious that you're very in love!

I love how proud you sound to be with your girlfriend (I guess that's what I'll call her? Correct me if I'm wrong...haha, I sound so stupid now so I'm just gonna continue what I was saying...) and everything's so jealous. It's almost humorous but it's great because the love is so obvious!

I lurve it!

Much Love,

Lady Glass

I'm sensing from your last few poems that you're in love :D well, she obviously is having a great effect on you. Antoher truly enjoyable, well written piece.

Oh, I like this. A lot of angst.

Fantastic Imagery, I could see what was taking place and hear it. keep writing. all my love, shadowed mind