Very nice, you have a good even style, even though it's very dramatic, it's done quite cleanly, which is effective.

Very powerful! The exclaimations are particularly striking, and the line breaks accentuate the force of the poem. I'm not sure exactly what you're refering to in the poem, but it's still a very strong piece of writing.

Deep, and very passionate, I enjoyed it, keep up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.