Reviews for A Question of Survival

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Frosthold 2007-07-25 ch 8,	abuseAnother great chapter! I can definitely see Keziah berating her self after loosing that fight to Quegon and co. But the fight its self was a little confusing but that's probably just me. -Frost
Frosthold 2007-06-22 ch 7,	abuseOh, how sad! Another great chapter
Frosthold 2007-06-20 ch 6,	abuseAnother amazing chapter! Just remember to spell out your numbers less than 100. -Frost P.S. I'm rewriting Nyx. I'm you get the time, please read over it. Thanks!
Frosthold 2007-05-08 ch 4,	abuseVery good! I might say something about Kiv taking her to a different room to train her.
Frosthold 2007-05-07 ch 3,	abusewow! Amazing story! I guess I'm a bit behind with only being on chapter 2 what with you having 86 reviews : ) Anyway, chapter 4 of Nyx is now up if you want to go read it. I promise I read more of your story later to make up for all the reviews you have done of mine. Thanks again! -Frost
Frosthold 2007-05-07 ch 1,	abuseVery interesting prologue! I'll read the second chapter when I get the chance. - Frost
Ara Crae 2007-04-30 ch 2,	abuseWow. This is an amazing story. Generally, I don't like sci-fi, but this story has changed my view. It's an amazing new plot and a great idea. I can't wait to read the rest of it! ~Ara
Lock.VII 2007-01-28 ch 28, anon.	abuseThat was simply AMAZING. i couldn't stop reading until i finished your whole story, which, in the end, never really completed itself, so i really must go read your sequel. But first i thought that i'd drop you a review~ =) I love the fact how you kepy Kez's identity a secret, though i find it really unbelievable how she's only 12. Personally, i picture her as more of a older, 18-ish girl, maybe even 16. Either way, amazing story. Though some things could've been made better, maybe it's just me that didn't seem to like the idea and how simple it seemed. For example, How Kiv's dad seemed to be hiding/running away because his stepchildren had found out he poisioned their mother. Couldn't he have just simply denied the fact? Or shouldn't he had been smart enough to get rid of the evidence? I love how you portrayed Dann when he first visited Kiv when he had first awoken. Worried over his friend, yet unable to hide the small jealousy feeling when he realizes that his best friend, whom once only seemed to 'trust/befriend' him, has now moved on and gotten himself another friend. Just that small little "something has now intruded it's way into our friendship" type of feeling, and realizing that he really knows nothing about his best friend, while this "rock" that has intruded it's way into their friendship, seems to understand Kiv, much butter than he, was has known him for a longer period of time, does. Being told by another that Kiv has a brother, and that his friend was caught because of a family-feud, makes him question his knowledge of Kiv, and then, later, learning that all this might've been told to Kez, and finding her in Kiv's room before he was even allowed to visit... I really understand his emotions and you portrayed him beautifully. Riv and Jex were nice characters. I liked how childish yet professional Riv was, while i enjoyed the laid-back attitude of Jex. Unluckily not much was told about these 2, and where they come from, and how they met Kiv. Anyways, sorry, i kind of went off and started analyzing your characters. If i offended you, i seriosuly did not mean to do such a thing. Great story, and i can't wait to read your sequeal =)
Frosthold 2007-01-19 ch 2,	abuseVery interesting, great names! I will read the next chapter when I get the chance.
Dani P 2006-12-09 ch 29,	abuseGreat story! had me hooked! a lil suggestion..actually swear dont just put the first letter. it ruins the story and makes it sound childish. other than that maybe expanding the story a lil, though i think if you dont its still great. can't wait to read the sequel!
leo the llama 2006-03-25 ch 29,	abuseall i can say now is wow. that was an amazing story! i just read it all this afternoon. it flowed really well all the way through and you kept with the action and suspence. as much as i hate cliff hangers and such, i love them just as much when they're done well, and how you did it was perfect. i only saw a few random grammatical errors, but looking through the other reviews you have, they've been pointed out to you, so i wont mention them here. i love how you ended it and set it up for the sequel! i cant wait to read it! ...which i'll probably end up doing now. on another note, thank you so much for reading and reviewing my story. the comments you left were really helpful and i appriciate it --leo
lol.. 2006-03-16 ch 1, anon.	abuseyou read alanna right? by tamora pierce
Anya Tempest 2006-02-05 ch 29,	abuseHi, thanks for your review, and I'm sorry it's taken me a while to get around to reading your story. In a word - awesome. The pace was excellent, the characters were believable, and your style is flowing and easy to read (I just read the whole thing in one sitting, I was quite surprised myself). The only thing I'd mention is the ages of the characters. Before you said what age they were, I had pegged Kez at around late teens (18, 19 etc.) and Kiv in his early twenties. They seem too mature to be younger, and the situation with the brutality of the military academy doesn't seem to fit with younger children. Your spelling seemed fine all the way through, although there are a few grammatical rules I'm going to mention. First of all, the whole "your/you're" thing. "Your" is possesive eg. "Pick up your jacket and let's go.", whereas "you're" is an abbreviation of "you are" eg. "You're going to tell me what I want to know." "There" is with reference to a place eg. "Over there". "Their" is possesive eg. "They straightened their jackets." "They're" is an abbreviation of "they are" eg. "They're in the middle of lunch right now." I noticed you also misused "to" in one of the early chapters. "To" is with reference to a journey or movement eg. "We went to the zoo". "Too" is referring to excess eg. "He was too strong." and "two" is the number. The mistake was in Chapter Four: He sighed. “I suppose I can’t really moan at you; I came here with a week old stab wound. It hurt like hell to start with, but I survived.” “And I will to.” - "to" should be "too" Anyway. I'll hopefully get around to reading the sequal soon, but I'm currently working on Issue Three of the Tempest Team and I'm finding it hard to read and review on here as much as I should. Keep writing, I really enjoyed this. You have a great story here.
JaveHarron 2006-02-01 ch 1, anon.	abuseOkay, a few comments: Why 2984 for global warming reaching critical mass? I'd think it would happen sooner than that. Anyway, if they have superluminal space transport tech, why do they not just use it to overhaul/terraform/inhabit Venus and Mars, rather than colonizing deep into outer space?
JaveHarron 2006-01-27 ch 1, anon.	abuseOkay, I see you read my martial arts column. This the story you need some weapons help with?

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