Yay! Another wonderfully written poem =] I like it, but then again I like your writing style and such so yepp okies well talk to you soon! toodles!

Pretty good. The short, sort of blunt style of the lines worked well with the subject matter, in my opinion. The length, however, made it incredibly repetitive, which made it less strong, less provacative. For a fully effective piece, sometimes you need to pick and choose. Doing so with this piece would greatly improve it overall, in my opinion. But in general, not bad.

sis, i'm glad u got an FP.com acount, cause you can put up u'r poems! *cheers*now, in poem new...very nice. Sad, made me tear upm but beautifully sad...*cries*