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| Gilee7 2005-10-19 ch 1,  | abuseYour married? I'm surprised. I had to kinda skim your profile when I read the summary for this. Too lazy to read it all. I saw you say "my 4-year-old", though. So yeah. For some reason that seems odd to me. I didn't expect you to be old enough to have a 4-year-old or be married, that is unless you got married at the age of 13 or something and was impregnated the same night. I always think of the people on this site as people in their teens, and by the time they reach their 20's, they've either stopped writing, or they've just moved on to other things, bigger things, perhaps. Ok, anyways ... I can't really give advice for poems, because I don't write poetry. I don't know the whole . . . mechanics of it. It's hard for romantic poems to not be corny or overly mushy. This wasn't really either, so that's a plus. It seemed genuine, real. I wasn't a big fan of it, though. It didn't seem to . . . flow(?) all that well or something. I don't know. It's still alright, though. Not as good as the one I just read. |
| chocolatetuna 2005-09-18 ch 1, | abuseWow, that is so sweet ^_^ |