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| Fluffy Piranha 2007-09-15 ch 1,  | abuseGreat work you have here. Love the depiction of a dragon in this poem, very stunning. I've got a few corrections, though. -- 1.) I’ll fly away on dragons wings (( * I'll fly away on dragon's wings * )) 2.) Most run when I advance (( This doesn't exactly fit for me, regarding the sentence before it...perhaps something like below? * And most will run when I advance * )) 3.) I’m older then you, although I am young (( * I'm older than you, although I am young * )) 4.) Beware: me vengeance is terrible (( * Beware: my vengeance is terrible * )) |
| Siamh 2007-07-12 ch 1, | abuseThis is a really good. Surprising because I don't usually read poetry however I noticed your review count and word count, to say the least I was curious. I am happy I got to read this! |
| Reggid 2007-06-30 ch 1, | abuseI really like this. Very nice job on the poem. |
| puppymobile 2007-02-02 ch 1, | abusei really liked it. it had some good visual sentences that sounded very nice. keep it up! |
| Sparkle Freak 2005-10-19 ch 1, | abuseOh wow, you are so right, I didnt think about it before now. It does remind me of Draco, (awsome movie, the secound one was bad though :( anyway) Good work Lakoria, I like this one, good use of words, and a great point of view. |
| T41N7 2005-09-21 ch 1, | abuseYay, I love dragon stuff! I really liked the line "I am older that you, although I am young" That doesn't apply to some elves though. I generally really like fantasy poems, especially when they rhyme. Keep posting your stuff, you're an amazing writer! |
| StephanieQueen 2005-09-19 ch 1, | abuseThis poem rocks my socks! The description of the dragon was so amazing. You're very talented. |
| nightdragon0 2005-09-19 ch 1, | abuseTells a powerful image of the dragon, and a nice one. |
| Lakona 2005-09-18 ch 1, | abuseI love the symbolism. Great one Jen :) |
| S. M. Sargent 2005-09-18 ch 1, | abuseThis poem started out strongly but pittled out towards the end... is that the end? It doesn't feel much like an ending to me. |
| roadwreckrob 2005-09-18 ch 1, | abuseThis poem reminds me of Draco from the movie Dragonheart. Keep writing - it is a good work. Hope to see you R+R some of mine sometime. |