Reviews for An Old Photograph

Reviews For: An Old Photograph

rocky 2007-01-20 ch 1, anon.	abusethis was great! It was like a female, modern version of the picture of dorian gray. Have you ever read that book? If not, you should. It might give you ideas for making this story longer, or revising it, not that it needs much revision. good job.
Sysi 2006-05-25 ch 1,	abuseThis reminded me of Oscar Wilde's book about Dorian Gray, because the thema of picture is same. However you have added there your own ideas (I think), like the condition about the photograph's locating. I especially like the tempo of this story. It moves forward slowly and there are only the scenes important to the plot line. It was a good decision for you not to tell anything about Lenore's family members and friends, because now the main focus is purely on the protagonist and her metamorphosis (or the lack of it ^.~).
Gwen 2006-01-16 ch 1, anon.	abuseI liked your story. But you should always proofread your stories before posting them. You made a few grammar and punctuation mistakes. For example in the seventh paragraph down, the man says, "Sh.. You're wish, Lenore". First of all it should read: Sh... your wish Lenore." You used the contraction "you're". You made it read as thus: You are wish, Lenore, which doesn't make sense. It should be 'your', which shows ownership. I see people make this mistake with contractions all the time on this site. And secondly, in the same sentence, you forgot to place a comma after Lenore. In fact you did that quite a lot in the story. And you spelled the demon's name: "Mephistiphilis". It's actually spelled "Mephistopheles". I'm a proofreader, so I notice these things. I'm not flaming you, I just wanted to help. Your story was pretty good. It's a cross between Faustus and The Picture of Dorian Gray.
hoshi-chan590 2005-12-02 ch 1,	abuseoh...good story...it kinda reminds me of that movie the league of extraordinry gentlemand and the guyes photo...u could never look ai or else he would die...it was kinda creepy...cuz he was like...thousands of years old...but yeea good sotry...and the moral is "being greedy is bad" right? me like a lot
CaprinaePsi 2005-11-10 ch 1,	abusenow i want to read the book you based this on
Draco Letty 2005-10-02 ch 1,	abuseWhy can't all stories be written so well? I applaud you on your work, good job I enjoyed reading it and it even got a message across at the same time. No problems with it from me, it was a awesome read. -Draco Letty, Author of Val Terumoto: Teen Detective
Miss-Nina 2005-09-24 ch 1, anon.	abuse0_0 gives me the creeps! Ek! I would NEVER make a deal with a random guy on the street! Especially if he worked for the Devil. Honestly, I don't beleive in Hell. ^^ Does that make me stupid? I hope I'm not cursed to hell because I'm an atheist! :0 Great story! I'll be waiting for chapter two. "Curiousity killed the cat." The story sort of reminds me of that. Miss-Nina
Rebekah the Scribe 2005-09-19 ch 1,	abuseNice...you did a great job retelling the old story. The character did seem like a person living in these times. Wonderful... ~CR

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