At first it was hard for me to find a rythem. But I realize that would be my error, see-as I read I felt that everything came together at the start of the hook, or chorus :And are you scared?: I love how you used different ryhme schemed, it felt more like a song then. I really liked it, the imagery was perfect! As if she/he was playing the vengeful lover-but turned out to be the victim. Or the executioner? Ah well, I need to simplify-basically I liked it. Later!