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| ViciousMan 2006-04-30 ch 1,  | abuseI like the philosophical question posed by the poem - I like the question posed - Whether knowing the truth is worth it... |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-10-09 ch 1, | abuseGood repitition and powerful thoughts. |
| simpleplan13 2005-09-26 ch 1, | abusehm very interesting... it definately made me think |
| AllyCred 2005-09-26 ch 1, | abusei like it very descriptive and vivid...well done. lots of love~AC~ |
| Moonjava 2005-09-22 ch 1, | abuseOh, I like this. I found it very touching and truthful. I sometimes wonder about things like this. You put it all together in such a nice package to. |
| KonekOniko 2005-09-19 ch 1, | abusethis is...different. i don't know, i can't exactly word it. oh well, i like it, i'm in somewhat of a rush, but you're making real progress. oh well, see more from ya soon... |
| Kakyou Takashiro 2005-09-19 ch 1, | abusedante without adieu... |
| poetic abortion 2005-09-19 ch 1, | abuseyour poetry always reminds me of haikus. I always get that feeling after reading your work that I'm reading a haiku. *sniffles* [is listening to ' The Ghost of You ' (My Chemical Romance), which makes her cry.] *shrugs* your writing always gives off that feeling of a haiku but not completely just, but that is what I love about reading your work. you improve with every poem and never give up! I admire you greatly for that strength. *nods* ok, enough sparkly praise. I have to say this is a fine poem, leaves an odd taste in my mouth but isn't at all horrid or awful but complete surreal and nearly dreamlike. though I only have one complaint, you repeated 'pondering' (goes for inferno too) which, to me, just sounded bad in the begining but I progress. the whole thing, overall, isn't bad or good, its better then OK but it is hard to place my finger on were I stand with this piece. I adore the lines - " What if you and I were a part of someone's dream? " & " What if this life as we know it, is just a lie? " & " Inferno..., the sizzling flames of truth. " - because they just b l e w. m e. a w a y. seriously, they are intelligioant & ( for the first two ) intriquing questions, which pique my own inteerest, and overall great flow. again, I think you should try to not use the same words after each other. it is a little peeve of mine (which I break all the time, quilty as charged) but you don't have to. merely pointing it out. ;) alright, I am very much happy to see you posting & honored to be on your reccomendation list. makes me all happy and smiley ... :) ok, keep writing & never give up you have great promise and need to give yourself more credit! *hugs* till your next poem ... ~* noelle |
| Arichos 2005-09-19 ch 1, | abusethis is sort of a philisophical view point, and gets pretty deep. Awesome. |
| mizu no kokoro 2005-09-19 ch 1, | abuseWell... this poem is definitely a change from the usual~ i like the words you chose, but the flow of the poem seems to halt quite abruptly at places, especailly at the beginning~ Good work! keep writing! |