God, you're evil. As Kris said, it seems a tad cruel to the readers to leave us hanging like that. Still a good piece though, and I enjoyed it. The two characters were faceless, which gave it a feeling of mystery and gets us all wound up about who's doing what. And the White guy - an alias, perhaps? Are we alluding to Reservoir Dogs?

All in all, a good piece of writing, and it shows you've clearly got skill. I'll read some more stuff from you...nay, I MUST read more stuff from you.

You call that a one shot??! There's no way you can just leave it there! Continue this dammit! For something you wrote in a short space of time, its fantastic, I can't believe you thought you had writer's block. Lyer. You were probably just too lazy. Lazy lying bastard.

Yeah so that was great, really well described. I like the way you write it as a one shot - you don't describe the characters much, instead just let the story unfold. Mysterious characters are best. Well done, hope I see more from you soon, particularly on this site.

Congrats, you are my first fictionpress favourite author.