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| Evany 2006-01-04 ch 1,   | Heya WOW! great poem I feel the sorrow you are trying to convey you are really good at poetry! ("D) |
| sloppy firsts 2005-12-28 ch 1, | beautiful, flows like water. |
| black*tears*of*innocence 2005-12-22 ch 1, | HOI! Why, hello there. I'm glad your back! Wow, your almost 17? I just turned 17 december 21st. For some reason, I don't feel any different(*laughs*) Oh, that reminds me, I should probably change my profile from "16 years old" to "17 years old" Alrighty, so, anywho, on to the wonderful poem...Wow, I really love the imagry here. Such creative writing. For example, "A forgotten field of broken souls" , "Bladed grass cuts deep into flesh", "When his body lies, let the wind take you..." I really love this poem. Great writing! And, thanks for all your great reviews!! Oh, thanks for telling me about my poem title. I always get confused with "your" and "you're" hehe, well, Keep writing forever and always!! luv always,~Davida |
| laughter at the funeral 2005-10-01 ch 1, | what i meant was that there were some misused punctuation marks...i think you should know the difference bet. the functions of a comma and a semi- colon...im so sorry, i usually copy-read the articles for the school paper that's why i get so technical...on this poem, you really made a good scene out of words...although i'm quite bothered by the last two line this time, i don't get the logic of "when his body lies, let the wind take you..." maybe it should be " "where" his body lies"... truly yours... |
| Plinky 2005-09-21 ch 1, | This goes so well with And I try and fall asleep!! Beautiful poem, lovely descriptions. Keep writing and POST THE NEXT CHAPTER OF YOUR STORY PLEASE! |
| wolfeh 2005-09-21 ch 1, | yay! You put it up! YAYAYAYYAYAYAAY! Like I've told you before, this poem is AWESOME. There simply is no other word to describe it! (Well, there probably is, but as you well know my vocab is limited...) Anywhoo, awesome!! Keep writing!! And update "And I try and Fall Asleep," PLEASE! I'M DYING HERE! ^_^ |
| ArchSaugim 2005-09-20 ch 1, | Beautiful. Really well written |