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Reviews For: Fireworks

paputsza 2008-02-04 ch 2, anon.	abusei wasn't serious about the dog thing insomuch. I didn't mean to offend you, i'm sorry.
paputsza 2008-01-26 ch 2,	abuseyay! pomeranians(and yaoi) but pomeranians don't yip, they bark. it's a ferocious dog. sounds medium sized, and less like a little orange puff.
mechante fille 2007-08-25 ch 2,	abuseHi! I was clicking around your links and came over here and was like 'YES!' I was actually looking for this story recently. I just love the whole concept, and the boys are so cute, and I couldn't remember where I had read it. Probably Sky had rec'd it, back before I knew you. Shame on my for not reviewing, though! Anyway, I reread and squeied all over again. (note my inventive spelling of the squ-word so that fp doesn't cut off the second e. I'm so smrt!) And, so I don't lose it again, clicks fav ^_^
Lady Psychic 2007-03-02 ch 2,	abuseThat was a really cute and enjoyable story. There weren't any noticible spelling or grammar errors. Also, Adriel and Keagan were very likable characters.
Raz Nic an t-Saoir 2005-12-06 ch 2,	abuseCute! Cuter than cute! And funny! Yes, I liked. I liked the characters, the zippy little one-liners you kept sneaking in there to make me giggle and the yippy dog. They're always funny. Hurrah! I'll be keeping an eye on you and if it wasn't getting late I'd be reading that other story of yours right now, but it'll have to wait until Friday.
Raz Nic an t-Saoir 2005-12-06 ch 1,	abuse"They defy the laws of physics and therefore cannot possibly exist!”Someone should tell Keagan that all the fun stuff in life defies logic and physics, it's what makes things interesting. ;)I really liked this. Your writing has this casual ease to it that makes it really relaxing to read. I grinned through this chapter and had to fight the instinct to immediately click onto the next and write a little review first.Oh and I don't know if you intended this or if it's happy coincidence, but Keagan comes from the Gaelic to mean "little firey one". I love that a guy who makes fireworks is called that.
Skyla Moon 2005-10-18 ch 2,	abuseAW that was so adorable! Oh my gosh now I think I'll cry from the cuteness! Seriously! ... So... think there might be a... say, sequel? :P Anyway, I loved it all, of course, (especially the end and the last line in particular) and I think you do your dialogu really well. It seems very natural. And, because I'm not cool, I have no advice... my apologies! Hehe. Nice warm-and-fuzzy type review.
SDMaxwell 2005-10-18 ch 1,	abuseBwaha! Found ya! Okay. First off, I'd like to say I really liked this one. Keagan and Adriel are just too cute. Besides which, I like the Millenium Falcon bit and Velvet's dog. All those little things just make it seem more life like. AND because your view on vampires is awesome. I like the change from making Adriel see violet to letting him see the sunrise. Now I want to see it too. Though I still got a kick out of "A black one!" Mostly because I recognized where it was coming from but also because I kept trying to imagine what a black firework would look like. However, I also have to say I'm a little sad that it's all over. T_T I liked the characters so much...I didn't want it to end. I loved it. glomps Good job.
princess max 2005-10-08 ch 1,	abuseYou're going to continue this, right? Because I think you need to:) Possibly the thing I love most about your writing, and what makes it fantastic rather than just 'easy to read' (although I'm a snob when it comes to other people's work and find a lot of fp unreadable) is the way you intersperse facts throughout your stories. The way Shiva asked Cordy about human calendars, Adriel's comments on Romanian culture and the physicist working with fireworks are all excellent touches that make the reader think 'wow, that's pretty cool'. Also, some of your sentences are outstanding. My only suggestion would be to get rid of (sorry, I should have put this in the other review) Shiva saying 'shoot'. The colloquialism sounded too edgy. But that's seriously it.
Skyla Moon 2005-10-02 ch 1,	abuseOh, very interesting! I love your names, especially Adriel. The vampire thing caught me off-guard, but you did some nice foreshadowing that I was too thick to notice. Smile. The only thing I'd say is that it seems a little rushed when he says he's a vampire. Since you jumped into both of their heads, you might want to take a look at what he's thinking before he says that. Something that secretive wouldn't be terribly easy to reveal. Also, the "tackle" thing and the tounge + neck made me smile quite a bit. Nicely done, indeed!
Nikerym 'Ksherea 2005-09-24 ch 1,	abuseo i'm so late with this, so i'll try to make it good. ^_^ ahem. i liked the opening scene, setting up the whole fireworks, evan/keegan friendship thing without being too obtuse about it. though the personal questions were a bit odd. ^_^ but i can so totally see some precocious little pre-teen asking if he's married. ^_^ um, the fireworks experiment was cool, i liked the description, the whole, purple ring after ten seconds thing, because it seemed so precise. i like keegan, he's neat, with his geeky scientist-y thing that he's got going on. adriel, i'm vascillating on, i can't decide. it seemed unrealistic, really for him to be 'oh i'm a vampire' after only having known keegan for one night, as it didn't seem like he had a huge, soul-wrenching connection with him. but i liked the tofu thing, and the geeky tofu thing keegan did. ^_^ um, yeah, okay, i'm off to read part two in your LJ because i'm slow and late and this has so been sitting in my taskbar for days. ^_^
Rachel Lynn 2005-09-22 ch 1,	abuseSque! Okay, I have to stalk you here too. It's just not enough to stalk you on lj only. ;3 La! I love this story. huggles Adriel, Keagan and Evan Poor Adriel. I always feel bad for him when I get to the part where Keagan doesn't believe him. ;_; Of course, I love that he eats tofu too... And I love, love Keagan's geekiness. hearts He's too cute. (Aw! I love the reciting of the periodic table as poetry! ^_^) tackle glomps Love this fic! (Er, but you knew that, right? ;3) You might have a bit more luck getting readers though, if it were under Supernatural or Romance instead of Sci-fi. But then again, it's not really a typical vampire story, so maybe it needs to be in a new genre. ^_^ flying tackle glomps Squee!! madly luffs on you

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