Good poem! It reminds me of a poem called "Ulysses" (perhaps, because it was about the same person) I read in English last year, by Alfred Lord Tennyson or one of the writers like him. This poem sounded sadder. I really liked the lines:

You grew older,

Smarter,

Colder.

I liked the way they sounded together. Happy writing. -- Sarika

Interesting sequel to the Odyssey. I like the flow of the poem and the way you break up the lines (though the short lines are not at all Homeric; were you going for a particular style?). A unique take from where the epic left off; I'd like to read more of your work.

"That you hadstayed " Had and stayed should be seperated.

This was a wonderful, wonderful poem. A nice twist on things.