Astounding collab. Very intricate and complex.

Wonderful.

quite an endevour here, esp since two people wrote it and it still was seamed together so well, a very beautiful and enjoyable poem, awesome job on both your counts

This is definitely more complicated, tehcnically, than the previous poems...they were much easier to read...but here the reader must pause and think about the meaning, and it's still beautiful though somehow far more melancholic and serious...I like it :)! Love, Mia

Oh god. This is beautiful. Kudos to both of you. It speaks so much.

borg of you are a fabulous writers and together it is like a gift sent down from a higher being. I love the second italiced line and the last regular line.

~* noelle

(yes, I'm feeling abstract lately. how about you?)