I like the brevity of it; every word is made more special and meaningful. If this poem were a person, it would be someone that abruptly drags you into a dark alley to scream at you for five seconds, shaking you by the shoulders, say goodbye, and then leave. It's very memorable, and I liked it a lot.

disturbing, definitely. but brilliant.

Seriously chilling, though i have to admit that i found the line "finger the live lips on your rotting flesh" a bit too grotesque

awesome

oh wow :. that was pretty fucking twisted and AMAZING...

the words create a spinechilling image, but in a good way. well done, i like it.

oh gosh, I can't believe this poem... it is truly brilliant. The words and phrases and sounds, juxtaposed with the idea... all make it so powerfully chilling. Morbid. Scarily Beautiful.

This reads like a thrilling murder novel. Brilliant, in short. It reminds me a bit of Perfume for some reason... Have you ever read it?

Morbid and deliciously chilling. Excellent piece of work, especially the last two lines.

"don't scream, darling, don't scream"

love it.

Wiw, very unusual and expressive, a powerful, haunting poem, both in its ideas and language, you've certainly got talent.

absolutely amazing. i love it.

Ew, but at the same time you made it so poetic and delicate. I like it a lot, especially the first line and the last ones.

Woah...that was scary and beautiful at the same time. You're a FANTASTIC writer.

I was disturbed and almost awed by this piece in a strange way.

I found the imagery grotesque if I took it in one way and sickening in another. I guess I look too deep in poetry.

I found a dead love in one part of my mind and a dead body in another.

Very good piece... artsy format... good flow.

Bravo... I will have to check out some of your other pieces.