The third line made me laugh. I'm amazed at how many ways you find to write about this same thing, this same feeling, and yet put so much of you into each piece, all these emotions, and make the poem unique sounding still.

Wow, yeah, this is good. I can relate to this a lot, and you used a great metaphor. Nice job.

Once again... How do you write like this?

Matt

wow.. I really like this.. the metaphor is relaly cool & the title is great

wow.i adore the metaphor here...a short piece but still amazing.especially the last line...wow,again.a favourite piece of mine by you.seriously, thankyou for writing it,its fantastic.

E.Ebony

this is fantastic, i know just where you're coming from. great comparison.

i adore the simplicity. yet, the message is clear and creatively done. nice work!